第1个回答 2011-03-10
Dear Ram,
Thank you for your concern about the construction of Hainan International Tourism Island (HITI).
The open of HITI (建设本身并不能吸引游客，只有当其开放时才可以) will attract more tourists than before, (more and more tourists every year.) and will bring a new opportunity to the tourism industry. Furthermore, it will provide more jobs to the people who have not got good jobs yet. (offer 的主语一般是人)
Hainan is a wonderful city. After this construction, it will become more and more beautiful. Additionally, the traffic in our city is better now. There is no doubt that Hainan is really like a big garden, and (as the matter of fact, in my opinion 逻辑不通，到底是事实上呢，还是在你看来呢？中国人能明白，但老外不明白), Hainan is the most beautiful place in the world. Do you want to take a journey to Hainan, my friend?
希望对你有所帮助。硬伤不多，但中式英语太过明显。
PS: 据我看来,海南绝对绝对不是世界上最美的地方…
第2个回答 2011-03-10
Dear Ram,
Thank you for your concern about the construction of Hainan International Tourism Island
The improvement done on Hainan's tourism will attract more tourists every year, which could be a huge push in the tourist industry. Many people that lives in Hainan does not have a decent job, since the construction creates new job opportunities, it gives a nice prompt on the employment rate in the city.
Our Hainan is a wonderful city, it will become more and more beautiful as the construction proceeds. Besides, the traffic in our city is much better now. After all, It goes with out saying that our Hainan is just like a big garden. From the bottom of my heart, Hainan is the most pleasant place in the world. Would you like to take a vacation in Hainan, my friend?
Yours truely,
XXX
帮你改了些句子..望采纳
第3个回答 2011-03-10
1.showing concern about
2.The construction of Hainan International Tourism attracts a host tourists per year,and develops the tourism.On the other hand, the construction also provided people with more jobs.
3.Hainan is a wonderful city. After following the construction,Hainan has increasly became more and more appealing.
3.It goes with out saying that Hainan is reallly like a big garden,and as the matter of fact,in my opion,Hainan is the most pretty place in the world.这句话有typo还是run-on sentence，我不知道你的意思不好改
4.结尾改成 Now, are you interested in traveling to Hainan? It will be our pleasure to welcome you！
第4个回答 2011-03-10
Dear Ram,
Thank you for your concern about the construction of Hainan International Tourism Island
The construction of Hainan International Tourism will attract more tourists every year,and it will contribute the development of the tourism. Since so many people in Hainan have no good jobs , this construction can offer a great chnce for more job opportunities.
Hainan is a wonderful city, and it will definitely become more and more beautifu after this construction. Besides,the traffic situation in our city has been better nowThere is no doubt that Hainan is reallly like a big garden.And as a matter of fact, in my opion,Hainan is the most pleasant place ever in the world.Would you like to take a journey to Hainan,my friend?
Best wishes!
Yours,
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如有详细要求，你可以再做补充。这样想法表达会比较充分的
另外提个建议，英语思维一般是先果后因的，所以壮语的位置很重要。
第5个回答 2011-03-10
Dear Ram,
Thank you for your concern about the construction of Hainan International Tourism Island
The construction of Hainan International Tourism will attract more tourists everyear,and it will develop the tourism.Many people in Hainan has not got good jobs ,but this construction can offer more jobs.
Our Hainan is a wonderful city,after this construction,Hainan has became more and more beautiful.Besides,the traffic in our city has been better now.It goes with out saying that Hainan is reallly like a big garden,and as the matter of fact,in my opion,Hainan is the most pretty place in the world.Do you want to take a journey to Hainan,my friend?