呵呵,写得不错,有情有景,不过这不能算作格律诗了,第一句就不合律。律诗讲究声律和用韵,还要讲究粘和对等,尤其是颔联(第3、4句)和颈联(5、6句)一定要对仗,每个音节的平仄要交错,用字上,一三五不论,二四六要分明,你这第一句“小”,“院”,“意”三字就全是仄声字了,其他的很多用律也都不合,中间两联也不太对仗。呵呵,枉自给你改一下,不一定合适,权作参考。
庭院深深春意浓,
悠悠小径傍花丛。
山茶一树花开早,
狗骨三枝果正红。
兰蕙含苞欲吐蕊,
宠禽拔步早争虫。
修身洒扫沿阶净,
适意持壶品玉茗。
追问谢谢!
只是,庭院深深我理解是大院,而我家只有小院而已,我觉得写抵调些好。
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