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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?
Humans are responsible for a variety of environmental problems, but we can also take steps to reduce the damage that we are causing to the planet. This essay will discuss environmental problems and the measures that governments and individuals can take to address these problems.
Two of the biggest threats to the environment are air pollution and waste. Gas emissions from factories and exhaust fumes from vehicles lead to global warming, which may have a devastating effect on the planet in the future. As the human population increases, we are also producing ever greater quantities of waste, which contaminates the earth and pollutes rivers and oceans.
Governments could certainly make more effort to reduce air pollution. They could introduce laws to limit emissions from factories or to force companies to use renewable energy from solar, wind or water power. They could also impose ‘green taxes’ on drivers and airline companies. In this way, people would be encouraged to use public transport and to take fewer flights abroad, therefore reducing emissions.
Individuals should also take responsibility for the impact they have on the environment. They can take public transport rather than driving, choose products with less packaging, and recycle as much as possible. Most supermarkets now provide reusable bags for shoppers as well as ‘banks’ for recycling glass, plastic and paper in their car parks. By reusing and recycling, we can help to reduce waste.
In conclusion, both national governments and individuals must play their part in looking after the environment.
本文句式，语法很好，不过仍存在一下几个问题：
1 本文过分关注语法，虽然句子正确，但句子与句子的联系，特别是句子的过渡与发展处理的不好。
2 本文在回答题目问题时的答题角度有些不直接。比如第二段，正常应该回答政府的能力，这个能力不仅仅是在空气污染方面，而是所有的能力。题干问，个人和政府能做哪些，如果你只回答政府能解决空气污染，是不是就不全面了呢？
3 语言论述组织性和条理性不是很好，比如第三段，本段论述个人能做的事，列举了很多，但给人一种罗列的感觉，没有一定的条理。另外，也需要类似于topic sentence的句子，来领起整个例子。另外要善于使用逻辑连接词。
4 开头重复感，模式化较重，应该换成较新鲜，较个性化的开头，比如反问，列数字，例子等方式。
5 总结段有些少，字数还要再加一些。
总之，雅思作文不光是语言没有问题即可，这只是最基本的要求，具体的还要看逻辑，看回答问题的方式，看语言有没有针对性，看句子之间的，段落之间的连贯性。本类作文属于report，那么你再写一篇argumentation的作文，估计问题会更多。
Humans are responsible for a variety of environmental problems, but we can also take steps to reduce the damage that we are causing to the planet. This essay will discuss environmental problems and the measures that governments and individuals can take to address these problems.
（最后一句语法对，但表达不贴近。this essay will discuss what measures governments and individuals can take to address these problems）
用手机看的晃眼。。。。上六分应该可以~