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Question

Students of present age feel more pressure than before. On the one hand, students have to do so much homework and complete a large number of study tests ¬—— some of them are even difficult to adults. Students would feel tired to deal with them. On the other hand, as the development of the computers, more and more computer games are created. It seems that computer games are more interesting and relaxing than study. The most of students like games more than study. Some of them who can’t control themselves will be addict to the world of Internet.

Answer 1

1.on the one hand改为 on one hand
2.as the development of the computers把as改为with，可把第二个the去掉
3.The most of students 改为most of the students
4.addict应该为addicted追问

是on one hand?还是on the one hand?我刚刚去查了下，这两个似乎都可以……？有什么区别么？我记得我们老师讲的是加the的，球解答~谢谢~

追答

很抱歉啊！on the one hand的确正确，不过我们习惯用on one hand，on the other hand
因为我一直用on one hand，呵呵，所以凭经验作出的判断还是不可靠啊 抱歉！

追问

谢谢你啊，以后还要向你多请教。要参加高考了，作文很烂，郁闷！

Answer 2

Nowadays,students feel more pressure than before. On the one hand, students have to do so much homework and complete a large number of study tests,that is why they find it difficult to communicate with adults,becasue those students feel tired when they communicate with adults.On the other hand, as the development of the computers, more and more computer games are created.It seems that computer games are more interesting and relaxing than study. Most students like games better than study.Some of them who can’t control themselves will be addict to the Internet world.