考研作文 推荐电影 请帮我看看写的有什么错误，能改进吗？

Question

Dear John
I am writing to you is want to recommend a movie where shows an Chinese assassin in Qin dying. The movie’s name is hero,you may be confuse.why an assassin is a hero,the reason of this phenomenon is that assassins have power,but they do not use it unlimited,because they know,with great power comes great responsibility.
In this movie,you would know a truth that a greet knight,for the country and for the people,it is the essence of the Chinese Xia culture.The chief actor of this movie is acted by Li Jet ,a famous actor in China,because he has kung fu , so the movie’s content is splendid. I strongly recommend you to watch this movie.
Wish you enjoy the movie, look forward to your reply.
Your sincerely
Li Ming

Answer 1

以下是我个人建议，仅供参考~

首先我觉得这篇文章写得略过简单，没有特别出彩的地方，有点像四级考试作文~

然后有些地方我觉得语法不对，写得有点中国式英语

第一句：I am writing to you to recommend a movie for you which shows an Chinese assassin in Qin Dynasty.

The name of the movie is hero,you may be confuse about why an assassin is a hero.

but they do not use it unlimited 这里unlimited应改为unlimitedly~副词修饰动词。

because they know,with great power comes great responsibility.
可以改为：the more power they use, the more resposibility they shuold pay.

The chief actor of this movie is acted by Li Jet ，这句actor应改为role.

In this movie,you would know a truth that a greet knight,for the country and for the people,it is the essence of the Chinese Xia culture.这句中it is the essence中is应去掉，不然一个句子有2个主语了。

he has kung fu ，这个我感觉不应该用has,但我也不知道用什么好

暂时就这些了，希望对你有帮助~

Answer 2

这个我也英语不是很好，如果闹了笑话的见谅见谅……
正文第二行you may be confuse 。 confuse是动词 be后不应该跟形容词confused吗？？求解……追问

-_-||英语什么的最麻烦了，，，，听你这么一说我也认为是confused了，，

追答

应该对吧……

Answer 3

第一句你应该是一个主语从句，但你缺少了主语的引导词，主语引导词是不能省的.。前面加that 构成主语从句。
where是引导状语从句， where shows an Chinese assassin in Qin dying，你这句话主谓宾不全啊，也不清楚你这句是什么意思。可能是我没理解你的意思，所以觉得有误。看了你的后面，如果你这句话表达的是：该电影是关于一个秦朝刺客的故事，我觉得这样改比较好：That I am writing to you is want to recommend a movie regarding an Chinese assassin in Qin dying.The movie was named hero.英语比较喜欢采用被动写法。而且电影也是被命名。maybe you are confusing考研英语句式要富于变化，一般时太多会感觉枯燥。你提出为什么，接着说原因，可以用这样的句式来增加亮点和单词量：there are some reasones of following were showed:firstly.....secondly......thirdly.......这样会比较有层次感
wish 是对未来的虚拟，你用的是一般时祈使句吗？好像不是这样用吧？两个祈使句之间加个and比较好，一个句子除非有链接词，否则不会出现两个动词。

觉得我说的有理，以后可以多讨论，没道理就当我胡说的吧