请英语好的朋友帮助纠正一下翻译错误:“Dear Professor: 我没有收到你。。。”

因为要查分的事情,我发过很多次邮件了,但是Professor就是不会信。我希望他能够去复查一下我期末的考卷。(同时我又怕因为发了太多次邮件而惹怒他,所以希望这份信的口气一定要客气真诚。)

(中文是想要表达的意思,翻译不必和中文完全一样)

中文部分:
Dear Professor:

我没有收到你的回信,我估计我之前的request被拒绝了。

但是我依然还是希望你能够复查一下我的期末考试试卷,因为我实在是无法相信我这门课考了一个这么低的分数。

我知道也许我因为这件事打扰了你很多次,我对此感到非常的抱歉,但是这个考试的结果对我来说太重要了,这将是我最后一次因为这样的是拜托你。

我将非常的感激if you could do this.

我的翻译:
Dear Professor:

I didn't receive any rely from you. I guess my previous request has been rejected.

But could you take some time recheck my exactly exam paper again, since i really can't believe I got a such low mark.

I Know i maybe bother you too much times about these kind things. I feel truly sorry about this. But this result means too much for me and this will be my last request

I will very appreciate if you could do.

I Know i maybe bother you too much times about these kind things. I feel truly sorry about this.

改成
I feel truly sorry to bother you so many times about this.

最后写I will appreciate it very much.

语法上就是much times -->many times
appreciate-->appreciate it
其他只是我的建议,您可以随意。

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看了楼上的回复我发现这里也是要改的
But could you take some time recheck my exactly exam paper again, since i really can't believe I got a such low mark.

take some time to recheck
然后exactly是副词,不能修饰名词,所以去掉就可以了
然后,改成? 后面since的s改成大写
然后a such low mark改成such a low mark,这个也是语法问题
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第1个回答  2015-07-15
Dear Professor,

I haven't received your reply yet. I bet my previous request has been rejected.

But I hope you could take some time to double check my final examination paper since I still can't believe I got such a low score against this course.

I feel truly sorry for bothering you so many times about this matter. But this result means much for me.

I will appreciate so much if you could do me the favor.

Sincerely yours,
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第2个回答  2015-07-15
But could you take some time recheck my exactly exam paper again,
it take some time to do 固定搭配
sb spent some time on/for sth
I Know i maybe bother you too much times about these kind things.
Know 不要大写
跟老外打交道不要太委婉,不要说你估计你得申请被拒绝,模凌两可的回答不好
第3个回答  2015-07-15
rely依赖,应是reply
可以把previous去掉
could you please take some time to my exam···
such low marks

so many this kind of thing
this换成it
this will be my last time to request you like this

will be very appreciate if you could help me
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