英语高手帮我改下这篇自己写的英语作文,有很多问题呢~

Question

题目:My Dream
Dream is sun.Dream is light.Dream is_______(写一个和前者适合的单词).
When I was a little a girl.I had a dream.I think the dream is very wonderful.Can you guess it? Yes,I want to be singer.
When I was nine years old.I listened one of Rong zu'er's songs.Its name is "Hui Zhe Chi Bang De Nv Hai(请用英文翻译一下歌名，是挥着翅膀的女孩）"Since then,I started learning to sing songs.
Learning to sing songs is very different.I spent a lot of time on it.I had a sorethroat soon.I had to eat so much medicine.But I'm not afriad(害怕，貌似写错了）of it.I still practied it hard.Because I belived if I practice hard,my dream will be ture(这里要用到“主将从先”这个语法，但我不会。）.I always say"Come On" to myself.I also learned to how to play the drums.It helps me a lot in music.
After two years,I did well in singing ongs.I began to take part in the singsing games.I did my best and won second places.I felt very exciting to cry.I thing my efforts were not in vain.Now, I want tn sing a song to my efforts and everybody:
(挥着翅膀的女孩英文版，这个歌词我有，不用管这点。）
I can fly
I’m proud that I can fly
To give the best of mine
Till the end of the time

Believe me I can fly
I’m proud that I can fly
To give the best of mine
The heaven in the sky

这是我上初二第一次英语演讲，重视~！所以花费了很多时间把这篇文章打上来让各位英语高手看看。
虽然身为英语委员，但英语语法却不好的要命。问行中出现很多语法错误，有的已经改了，但有的还没发现。各位可要仔细看看了，包括：字母大小写错误，格式错误，语法错误，单词错误 etc.
下面有几个问题，想让大家帮助思考~
1.同学都说挥着翅膀的女孩这首歌曲不好听，我想让大家帮助找一首好听而且我这个文化水平会读能唱的...（初二英语水平，剑桥3级）。
请大家帮忙想想，必须是关于梦想的，很纯真的，很上口好听的，而且要我会读滴，能唱滴。当然在我的文章中说到了“容祖儿（Rong Zu‘er）”，如果要换歌曲，这个就要改成别的歌手名字了，大家懂么。就是音乐换了，歌手名也随着换。谢谢。
2.第一段我留了个空，希望填个词上去，我原来写过一个词，单词忘记了，但是记得读音，我拿汉语写给大家：剖（pōu）肉（ròu）代（dài）特（tè）.....如果想不到这个单词，换个符合我要求的也行，要求在第一段写着呢。
3.大家尽量调毛病，把我写错的原句抄上去，下面写正确的。谢谢大家啦~

因为星期一就用了，我是个住校生，明天就要去学校，所以今天晚上加班提了问题。拜托各位了。
那位英语高手肯帮我忙，小妹感激不尽啊~
还有希望大家都是自己写的，不要找些什么在线翻译一翻译就好了，谢谢，不要敷衍哦~~
小妹虽然没有悬赏分，但是如果有英语高手真正为我解难，我一定大大的加分~~大大的加分~偶很信誉滴~！~！
谢谢，小妹好困，还要等答案，英语高手们上啊~~
谢谢~~~
来刷分的走啦~!偶很急滴!
看到这么好心滴GGMM来回答哦.
都回答的那么好...分怎么给捏?

强调~~我写的是过去式~~

主将从现的意思是
主句是将来时,从句是一般现在时

Answer 1

Dream is sun.Dream is light.Dream is_______(写一个和前者适合的单词).
(Dream is the light and is the sun as well.如果你非得要排比句的话，那就：Dream is the candle;Dream is the lamp; Dream is the sun as well; because the lamp is brighter than the candle,and the sun is the brightest.)
When I was a little a girl.I had a dream.I think the dream is very wonderful.Can you guess it? Yes,I want to be a singer.
(i have had a wonderful dream that i will become a super singer one day since my childhood.Do you think so?)
When I was nine years old.I listened one of Rong zu'er's songs.Its name is "Hui Zhe Chi Bang De Nv Hai(请用英文翻译一下歌名，是挥着翅膀的女孩）"Since then,I have started learning to sing songs.
(A girl flies with her wing)
To learn to sing is very difficult.I spent a lot of time on it.I had a sorethroat soon.I had to eat so many medicine.But I'm not afraid(害怕，貌似写错了）of it.I still practied it hard.Because I belived if I practice hard,my dream will come ture(这里要用到“主将从先”这个语法，但我不会。i don't understand what you said.）.I always say"Come On" to myself.I also learned how to play the drums.It helps me a lot in music.
After two years,I did well in singing .I began to take part in the singsing games.I did my best and won second places.I felt so exciting that couldn't help crying.I thing my efforts were not in vain.Now, I want to sing a song to my efforts and everybody:
(挥着翅膀的女孩英文版，这个歌词我有，不用管这点。）
I can fly
I’m proud that I can fly
To give the best of mine
Till the end of the time

Believe me I can fly
I’m proud that I can fly
To give the best of mine
The heaven in the sky
前两句修改的在括号里，后面的直接在你的句子修改，你写得不错作为一个初二生。

Answer 2

Dream is sun.Dream is light.Dream is_______(写一个和前者适合的单词).
When I was a little a girl.I had a dream.I think the dream is very wonderful.Can you guess it? Yes,I want to be singer.
When I was nine years old.I listened one of Rong zu'er's songs.Its name is "Hui Zhe Chi Bang De Nv Hai(请用英文翻译一下歌名，是挥着翅膀的女孩）"Since then,I started learning to sing songs.
Learning to sing songs is very different.I spent a lot of time on it.I had a sorethroat soon.I had to eat so much medicine.But I'm not afriad(害怕，貌似写错了）of it.I still practied it hard.Because I belived if I practice hard,my dream will be ture(这里要用到“主将从先”这个语法，但我不会。）.I always say"Come On" to myself.I also learned to how to play the drums.It helps me a lot in music.
After two years,I did well in singing ongs.I began to take part in the singsing games.I did my best and won second places.I felt very exciting to cry.I thing my efforts were not in vain.Now, I want tn sing a song to my efforts and everybody:
这样就可以了吧

参考资料：于琛

Answer 3

Dream is sun.Dream is light.Dream is something always in my mind(这样感觉要押韵，不过还是得你自己选择）
I had a dream when I was a little a girl..Having a dream is really a wonderfulthing.Can you guess what i'm dream for? well,I want to be a singer.
When I was nine years old.I liked one of Rong zu'er's songs.Its called "A girl waving her wings(这个是我自己翻译的，可能不是很准确）"Since then,I started singing.（songs放在这里有点累赘）
Singing is very difficult(困难）.it costs me large amounts of time to learn and practise which leads to a sorethroat soon that time.I had to eat plenty of medicines.But I'm not afraid of taking pills.I still practised hard.For I believe if I practice hard,my dream will come ture someday in the near future(这个句子是自己觉得还可以）.I always say"Come On" to myself when facing with difficulties.I also learned how to play the drums.It helps me a lot in music.
After two years,I did well in singing songs.I began to take part in one of the singsing competitions.I did my best and won a second place .I felt really excited then i cried about this.I believe that my efforts were not in vain.Now, I want to sing a song to everybody:
有一些句法和拼写的错误我已经基本改过来了，不知道有没有达到你的要求，不过初中的演讲应该完全够了。我不是什么高手，只是比较喜欢英语，希望对你有帮助。

Answer 4

Dream is hight.Drean is big.