大家好～拜托大家帮我看看我写的这篇英语作文 感激不尽 帮我挑出错误就行 剩下的我自行百度

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大家好～拜托大家帮我看看我写的这篇英语作文 感激不尽 帮我挑出错误就行 剩下的我自行百度Dear Helen,
Hello,Helen,I am writing this letter to express my sincere congratulations for you has just won the first prize in the long-distance race of 5000 meters in the spring sports meet of our university.You are set a good role model for me.
In the yesterday, I hear about you winning the first prize in the spring sports meet of our university. It's can't leave that exert yourself to success.Meanwhile,you will be better if you can insist that you has been training every day.
Please accept my bearish congratulations.I am sure that you will make greater achievements in the future.
Sincerely yours,
Zhang Wei

Answer 1

个人建议，仅供参考：

1. 在 has 前加上 because you ,将你赢得冠军该句变为从句（原因状语）。
2. set 前的 are 去掉。
3. In the 去掉，yesterday 可直接作为时间状语，放于该句末尾 university 之后更为合适。
4. 建议将 wining 改为 won,从句中谓语动词发生于过去，用过去时。
5. It's 改为 It，一个句子只能存在一个谓语动词。
6. 建议将 insist that you has been training every day 该句改为 keep on training every day.

其他问题不大。追问

先谢谢你哈 回答的好认真 第四个我也考虑过用won 但是我觉得可能在about介词后用doing 不知道我的想法正确吗

追答

把wining改为won, 个人是把hear about 后的句子看作为宾语从句，hear about 为主句的谓语。